For the Gearin' Up to Get an Agent blogfest, week two is all about creation and the story chain. If you'd like to read the post before mine, check out Deana's blog.
Tony plopped a bag down in front of Dio and she fell to herknees, digging through it, unable to wrap her mind around her parents death and...Europe? Suddenly, she hated Europe too.
Dio chucked out an old bottle of shampoo out of the bag and her old stuffed weasel from when she was little. Surely, she wouldn't need those.
"Come on, Dio. We need to leave." Sandy waved and Dio reluctantly dragged her bag toward the taxi. Dio sat down and began to cry when her fingers touched dried boogers on the seat.
Life is so unfair.
To follow the story, go to Frost Lord's blog.
Ooohh. . . my part's coming up and I love the way you've deepened her emotion.
ReplyDeleteAww, thanks, Callie! Can't wait to read what you post :)
ReplyDeleteI'm shuddering in disgust. Emotion well conveyed.
ReplyDeleteFor something so emotional I am CRACKING UP! Boogers on the seat...very nice touch:)
ReplyDeleteLife is unfair--good job trowing in a universal truth. It balances out the boogers :)
ReplyDeleteI want a stuffed weasel. Nicely done and great voice!
ReplyDeleteI liked it too! You did a great job setting it up for me!
ReplyDeleteI give you my thanks, 'cause you saved my ass. :D
Oh, so emotional. Nice touches with the things she tossed aside. This is becoming such a tear-jerker
ReplyDeleteYes, perfect reaction to the big news. This story is really coming along!
ReplyDeleteBrilliant! I also love how you've kept Tony's voice exactly the same. Love the Boogers bit to lighten it up too.
ReplyDeleteLove the stuffed weasel!
ReplyDeleteAlot of emotion in just a few sentences. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad y'all like it :) Thanks!
ReplyDeleteI like the boogies, along with tense emotion.
ReplyDeleteGreat emotion and detail, especially with the boogers on the taxi seat. Ewww :-)
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